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My second case of insperation.
Tortured Lives
Chapter one: Sisters
It was a cold and rainy night when the crystal mage met the man that she would very soon come to despise. The rain pounded her face and the wind whipped
her china blue hair as she entered a clearing. Cryala looked around for the man that sent her a message to meet him in the clearing that she had just entered.
Suddenly she tensed as she sensed another presence close by. A pair of crimson eyes loomed into sight accompanied by a low menacing laughter. “Who are
you,” she asked.
The man looked down at her and said, “You are a crystal mage are you not,”
“Yes I am but you still haven’t answered my question.
“Well as to who I am, my name is Hiyoko,” Cryala froze, Hiyoko’s hand shot out and grasped her upper right arm in a vice like grip.
“Hey what are you,” Cryala’s words were cut off by a skeletal hand covering her mouth. “Now you listen here,” he hissed in her ear as he pulled her towards
him. “You do everything I tell you to and I will spare your life,”
Cryala had no choice. She closed her eyes to try and block some of her crystal magic, luckily for her it worked.
“It seems that the famed crystal mage isn’t as strong as people believe her to be,” Hiyoko sneered. Cryala just gave a weak sob before falling unconscious.
The eyes of a sixteen-year old began to water as she remembered the story her mother had told her before her baby sister was born. Katie wasn’t the type
of person to look after people like her sister Shadow due to what her father had wanted from her ever since the age of four. Her mind shifted to that day
and she moved over to her bed to think.
“Kathryn,” a loud voice broke the sleepy silence in Rebuctic Mansion in the early hours of morning.
“Yes father,” answered a small girl who looked to be about the age of four. Her hair was yellow with blue cat ears and tail but her eyes were a deep golden
color and seemed to hide a dark past that no one but herself should ever know. She climbed out of her bed and stepped slowly over to her father who was
standing in the doorway. “Have you ever done anything for your baby sister Katie,” he asked. Katie looked at her father fully intending to say yes but
when she saw the look on his face she thought better because she knew that if she did her sister Shadow and herself would be biting off more then they
could chew. “No father because I know what she is and have and will never care about a little fire bug like her,” she replied knowing that Shadow could
hear her and prayed that she didn’t believe that white lie of hers.
Hiyoko closed the door on his daughter and turned to Cryala who was cradling a small girl in her arms. The girl had long orange hair with red dragon wings
and dragon tail. The infant looked up at her mother with a small smile but when her mother didn’t look down at her she proceeded to play with the crystal
dragon pendent around her neck. “Shadow should at least be able to grow up Hiyoko. You know as well as I that if introduced to darkness at her age can
lead to devastating consequences and even death,” said Shadow’s mother ignoring the orange glow around her daughter and the fact that a child so young
was trying to undo the damage that she had suffered at the hands of a perverted monster only four years ago.
“Shadow has already chosen her path as young as she is she will never be a use to me mage and you should know that,” said Hiyoko and with that he began
to channel his power into the small girl who fell into a coma for eleven years to allow her own powers to strengthen and grow to destroy the monster who
tried to corrupt her and her mother.
Katie shook her head to rid herself of the memory of the impressive amount of power that her father had transferred to her baby sister. Shadow was not even
a year old and had already chosen her path in life. Katie looked down at her sister’s unconscious form on the bed next to hers. It wasn’t fare that Shadow
was willing to go through so much to choose her path and that as her older sister Katie couldn’t decide. Katie picked up her school things and left never
intending to come back.
Chapter Two: Awakening
For eleven years that body stayed immobile. For eleven years that body stayed silent. For eleven years that body thanks to the large amount of power in
it was changed and it grew to fit it all in. Shadow opened a bleary eye and looked around the bedroom she was in. It was her sister’s room as she had remembered
it with one exception, no sister. “Kat where are you,” she said, her voice almost a whisper.
“I’m right here Shadower,” came a voice from beyond Shadow’s line of sight. Shadow turned her head slightly to one side and saw her sister standing near
the only window in the room, more like the entire house. Katie moved closer to her sister and peered intently into those brown eyes that seemed to lead
to a broken and unwanted soul.
“So Shadow you held up your promise that you would take the darkness and embrace it as your own along with the other elements,” Katie said in a hissing
whisper.
“Kat I may have only been one but I knew and still know what our father is and what he wants from me,” said Shadow meeting her sister’s golden eyes.
“For years I have watched you from afar, aiding, guiding and controlling your powers to the best of my ability but now it is time for you to train and become
the best you can. Just don’t forget that you are still my little sister,” explained Katie.
“But Kat you were only four, I may have been unconscious but I was still aware of everything going on around me,” said Shadow. Katie just smiled down at
her and the two took the time to get to know each other.
It had only been a few weeks but Shadow and Katie became closer than just sisters. Most twins let alone sisters ever become best friends. It was an idea
that totally disgusted their father. That is why during those two weeks their father started plotting murder.
It was the day of Shadow’s thirteenth birthday and Cryala along with some of Shadow’s friends and sister planned a small party for her. Shadow’s friend
Takieo had the job of keeping Shadow away from the house until that afternoon. It was common knowledge in the group that Takieo had something of a crush
on the red dragon anthro but was too chicken to do or say anything about it. The two friends left early in the morning and just spent the time doing whatever
thirteen year olds did. When Shadow returned to the house she was bombarded by her friends, mother and sister. Shadow’s mother pulled her aside and gave
her the one thing she knew that her daughter would soon need.
“Shadower I never got to thank you for breaking your father’s control over me but then again you were only a one year old. Anyway that dragon pendent now
belongs to you along with my powers,” said her mother
“But mom without your power you’ll,” Shadow’s words trailed off and her mother put a hand on her shoulder.
“It’s my time little one and there isn’t anything you can do except accept it. You have so much ahead of you and I have lived my life the best I can,” Cryala
by this time was breathing weakly and Shadow pushed her mother to lie down. The time Cryala’s head hit the pillow her spirit was no more. Shadow felt tears
well up inside her but she held them back. It would do her no good to have her father see her weak like that.
Shadow turned and left the room to find her sister and found her sitting away from everyone else under a rather large oak tree.
“Kat I have got to get out of here,” said Shadow breathlessly. Shadow finally looked down at her sister after a few moments of silence and noticed silent
tears trailing their way down Katie’s cheeks. “Kat is everything ok,” Shadow asked bending down and whipping the tears with her sleeve.
“Yeah Shadow everything’s just fine unless you count the fact that our father…” muttered Katie. She finally turned her gaze to her younger sister and Shadow
understood. Katie was raped several times before this but never in front of her father’s friends. She stood and Shadow embraced Katie in a quick hug and
then Katie asked her what happened.
After Shadow had finished retelling her story Katy was fuming. She took a few steps away from Shadow and then turned.
“Shadow come with me,” she said but before Shadow could take even two steps she was racked by a pain that was almost unbearable. She tried not to cry but
she couldn’t help it the attack from her father’s dark power hurt too much.
Katie turned in time to see a furious father and a crying sister. What was more disturbing was that shadow seemed to be enveloped in an aura of water and
dark magic. Wasting no time she reached out to her sister and pulled her into an aura of pure energy to both heal and calm her. Picking her up and cradling
her she turned and ran as fast as she could from the place she had called home for years. She wasn’t fast enough to ignore the last thing she would here
from her father, “If you interfere in another one of my murders I will kill you,”
Chapter Three: Conversations
Katie placed Shadow onto her bed and she immediately curled into a protective ball. Shadow started whimpering and Katie put a hand on her sister’s shoulders.
“Dad I don’t even want to know why you have it out for Shadow and me but rest assured we will kill you,” she thought as she got into bed next to her sister.
She drifted off to sleep keeping her cat’s tail around her sister who by this time had calmed down significantly.
In the morning Shadow opened her eyes to see the rising sun streaming down onto her and her sister who was still asleep. “Kat I know I’ll never live up
to what you expect from me but I want him dead and out of my life. I just hope that things don’t back fire on the two of us,” Shadow thought as she started
to stroke Katie’s silky yellow hair. “For the dammed I don’t even know who I am anymore,” Shadow said pushing a strand of hair out of Katie’s face. Katie
opened her eyes and felt Shadow practically petting her. Although she wasn’t complaining she couldn’t let her little sister know how she felt about her
right now. It was too soon in her opinion. Katie moved a bit closer to her sister and although she didn’t want to she started to purr. Shadow looked down
when she heard her sister purring and smiled.
“Morning Kichi,” said shadow promptly rolling off the bed. Kat just smiled at Shadow’s antics and rolled out of bed herself. The two made their way to the
kitchen where Katie attempted to cook breakfast for the two of them but failed miserably.
After several more tries and a few singed tail hairs on Katie’s part she gave up and the two sat at her kitchen table indulging on some of Shadow’s left
over birthday cake from the day before. The two sisters sat in comfortable silence for a while until Katie finally spoke.
“Shadow you do know that this isn’t over, the trouble between us and dad right,” she asked after a few minuets. Shadow just nodded and stared off into space.
“Kat, this isn’t right. I mean I lost mom, dad attempted murder on me for some reason and I have a strange feeling in the pit of my stomach just thinking
about the fact that he violated you in the worst way yesterday. I mean you know what I am and well,” Shadow trailed off lost in her own thoughts.
Hiyoko was fuming, he lost the only thing that could make sure that Katie did what he wanted but then she totally betrayed him and helped that little trouble
maker escape him only a few hours ago. His thoughts fell on his pathetic excuse for a wife. Cryala had done everything in her power to keep the brat alive
for the past eleven years and now she was dead and her power given to Shadow. He would have to finish this soon unless those two pitiful sisters actually
realized how they felt about each other.
Katie was sitting on top of a tree trying to think about how to train her little sister but nothing came to mind. Suddenly a small devilish looking demon
flew annoyingly close to her head. She looked down and saw shadow holding a crystal sword and Cryala’s dragon pendant around her neck. Katie knew that
Shadow wasn’t strong enough mentally to keep that sword out for long and had to do something before things got out of hand. She summand her own crystal
sword and leapt off the tree forcing the two blades to meet. “If there is one thing you need,” said Katie forcing the two blades down. “Is mental strength,”
she finished forcing her sister to her knees. Shadow looked up at her with a look that plainly said thanks. As her sword disappeared shadow realized that
she had a lot of work ahead of her.
Chapter Four: Lovers
Shadow sat on a low tree branch over looking her sister’s house. She stared up at the bright full moon with many things on her mind. It had been a year
since she had started her training under her sister Katie and for some reason the pain and aching never caught up with her. There was no denying that her
and her sister had gotten really close over the past year and Shadow couldn’t figure out why. “I mean sure there is something that attracts me to her but
I shouldn’t even be. I mean it doesn’t matter that she’s my sister, I shouldn’t be feeling like this,” she thought as her gaze fell on Katie’s bedroom
window. In truth the two sisters had gotten really close, closer than most people would ever get with anyone. They would go into each other’s room when
one or the other had a nightmare, Katie’s consisting of the abuse she had suffered at the hands of her father and Shadow’s about losing the one person
keeping her alive. She tore her gaze away from the place she had called home for the past year and heard something land on the branch below her. She looked
down to see Katie staring up at her.
Katie saw Shadow out on the tree outside her window and fore some reason couldn’t stop looking at her. Too her, Shadow was perfect in all the right places
and the fact that they were sisters didn’t matter. “Blood ties be dammed! I don’t care what she is to me,” Katie thought as Shadow shifted her gaze away
from the window. All that mattered to Katie was that the two of them should and would be together for ever and for always. She had lead Shadow to believe
that her love for her was nothing more than sisterly for the past year, but that wasn’t true. Katie couldn’t hide it anymore, it was time for Shadow to
find out how she really felt. Katie opened her window and leapt onto the branch below her sister.
For a moment the two sisters just stared at each other before Katie moved to join her little sister. Shadow looked into Katie’s eyes which had always made
her wonder and she finally saw what she had been trying to see for a year. A deep sense of unconditional love, that’s what she saw and Shadow could tell
that her sister saw the same in her. She fell into Katie’s arms and felt her sister’s lips brush against her own. She looked at Katie who leaned down and
kissed her. As the kiss continued a little longer the two both knew that everything would be alright.
As the kiss broke Shadow said, “I might be pushing it but,” her voice trailed off into a whisper, “I love you Katie,” Katie smiled and placed another quick
kiss on her sister’s lips and replied, “I love you too Shadow and don’t you ever forget that,” Shadow felt the tears well up at her sister’s words but
held them back. She fell into her lover’s arms once more and Katie pulled her close, never wanting to let go. She leapt back into her room where the two
fell into bed still in each other’s arms.
The next morning was a bit awkward with the two sisters waking up and finding the bed sheets twisted around them. They both knew that they did more that
night then they would ever admit to anyone. After a few minutes of forced conversation Shadow heard something slide under the front door. She decided to
see what it was and found a quickly scrolled note on the door mat. “Um Katie you might want to see this,” she said.
Shadow and Katie,
It has been a year since the two of you escaped me but not this time. Meet me at the riverside in one weeks time and we will finish what I started.
Hiyoko
Katie who had been reading over her sister’s shoulder turned and let out a string of swear words Shadow never thought her sister knew. As for her, Shadow
just turned the letter into a smoldering pile of ashes.
“It seems you were right when you said that things weren’t over between us and him Kitty,” said Shadow turning and glaring at her lover and sister.
“Listen to me Shadower, As far as he knows we are just really close as sisters. As far as I’m concerned that doesn’t matter because he will use you to try
and get to me and likewise me to get to you,” explained Katie pulling Shadow onto the couch and insuring her that everything would be ok. The two just
sat there watching the sky enjoying the feeling of being around the one who matters.
Chapter Five: losses
A small bat-like demon flew to his master’s encampment, an excited look on it’s mutilated face. “Lord Hiyoko, Lord Hiyoko! I have some news that will please
you,” it said in a sing-song voice. Hiyoko looked up from the letter he was writing to his daughters, not in the mood for games but curious non the less.
He glared at the demon and gestured him to speak. “My lord, it seems that Shadow and her sister are more then you originally thought. The two over the
past year have developed feelings for each other and last night they both confessed those feelings,” it said in a single breath in fear of being cut off
by his master’s wrath. Hiyoko looked thoughtful for a moment and decided to use the information to his advantage.
“Those girls, I’ll let them think that I think they are nothing more than sisters. Then I can gain control of one or the other and my plans will be much
easier,” he mused. “Thank you Lixo, you have done me a grate service this morning,” he added to the bat which flew off to do whatever it did daily.
Shadow and Katie sat on the edge of a cliff over looking the ocean. It was the night before they were due to meet their father for what each hoped would
be the last time. Each of them had different emotions going through their minds but they shared a single thought “Will we get out of this alive?” The two
sat in comfortable silence for a few minutes until Katie leaned against a rock. Shadow took that to mean that she could curl up with her sister and so
she did. She moved into Katie’s lap and felt her sister’s cat tail move around her. She reached behind her lover and began to stroke Katie’s furry cat
ears and a low purr could be heard from her sister’s throat.
“Shadow,” Katie whispered pulling a golden heart locket out of an inside pocket of her robe. Shadow looked at the locket closely, it was well crafted and
had a strange red symbol on it. “Power for power,” she muttered, Katie just smiled.
“Listen, no matter what happens keep that locket with you at all times. Our powers are linked because we are related by blood and now even more so. That
locket just might save both our lives tomorrow,” explained Katie. The two sisters sat and watched the setting sun both knowing that it might be their last
night together. The sun slowly sank behind the mountains and the sky was slowly turning from golden orange to deep velvet black. The two headed to bed
for the night, not knowing what was in store for them the next day.
The sun was rising over the horizon when Shadow awoke in Katie’s arms. She moved over to the window and stared out it. She knew from the second she woke
up that something was definitely wrong. She knew that she was both a darkness and a fire element by birth and after being unconscious for eleven years
she had always felt a large amount of uncontrollable power in her soul but couldn’t explain it, but this morning it was stronger, much stronger. The thought
of losing control made Shadow a little nervous. Sure having a dark secret and having it come out would make anyone nervous but that didn’t matter to her.
She glanced at the river that was visible in the distance, the rising sun making it look as if the river contained blood, not water. Shadow traced a finger
along one of the silvery scars on her arm. She would always resort to cutting instead of talking about her problems but she didn’t care. It to her was
a way to relieve the pain even if others didn’t like it much. “What’s done in the privacy of one’s own room is one’s own, she thought as she heard Katie
stir in the bed.
The two sisters made their way to the river bed, the sun was high in the sky now and each wore blank looks and attempted to conceal their emotions before
their father had a chance to read them and predict each and every move they made. They only had to wait a few seconds until a large shock wave of dark
energy flew the two of them up into the air and back down. Before anything could get to chaotic the two spared a quick glance at each other and took a
good look at the man who had finally stopped hiding behind the darkness and shadows he loved so much. He had semi-long black hair and glowing deep dark
brown piercing eyes. His skin was a sickly red color, but the thing that caught Shadows attention was a long black crystal that was glowing a violent shade
of purple. The crystal’s purple aura pulsed and Shadow couldn’t take the building darkness inside her anymore. She released it in one all mighty blast
the same instant that Katie sent forth her own type of power. The explosion that followed knock the three off their feet and separated the two sisters.
When the smoke cleared Hiyoko was laying on the ground, definitely dead but Shadow was no where to be seen. “NO,” Katie whispered and tried to sense her
little sister but couldn’t find her. Katie knew that Shadow wasn’t dead but then there was only one thing that could have happened. “He took you Shadow
but I’ll get you back I swear I will,” she said staring into the river bed that now contained Hiyoko’s body and blood. Katie’s knees gave out and she broke
down in tears for the only person that actually showed her that she had a purpose in this world.
The End
Very well written, if I may say so myself. Some spelling errors as well as a few gramatical ones but, for the most part, for leasure writing, it was very well put together. Keep up the good work. Only question is? how were they eating birthday cake left from the day before if they had ran away from the house where the cake was had originally? And how did they just automatically have a house? The realism of the situation was lost on me, but all in all, a great concept, if polished up, could be a good story, if you'd ever planned to continue it or write like a short sequel or something.
If you want to see something else go to the other topic I have. "The Keepers of the Elements. That was actually the first story I wrote. Thanks for pointing out the birthday cake problem. the only explination I can give you is that they are magical so things tend to happen that might not otherwise happen.
Yes, although it's not necessarily my type of literature, it's very well-written. I really liked your description fo the sun and its setting and rising in the morning. Keep it up!
Hey, if you've got any more chapters to this, by all means, post them!
I have the first chapter of the sequal done but that is it so far.
oK, just post them whenever they're done! lol
It wasn't good, it was pretty um, beginnerish. Well, my critiques.
You need better transitions. I was often confused, and thought if you honestly tried you could have done it some justice.
Okay, the sisters grown 11 years, so why is the seventeen years old cradling the thirteen years old like a two years old? It doesn't make much sense. I am fifteen, but I can barely pick a eleven years old up. It's not very possible. Well, also, They ran away... so they got a home somehow. How? Do they secretly have a home? So, what happened. Also where did they bring the cake out from if they left rather quickly, and was almost impossible to pack up a messy cake.. Well, unless the girl stuck the whole thing in her bag in about two seconds. I don't think so. Look over it, and rewrite. Don't give me the damn excuse of this being a fantasy, because I write fantasies too, and I can make it less disasterous.
I don't call this a beginner, if you saw the stuff I wrote back in junior high, compared to them this is pretty good. As long as I like what I write and there are some people who actually like it I don't care if it is too beginnerish. I've seen a whole hell of a lot worse than this.